I Raised a Bird
by Tweeting Green

a bird I raised
often inadvertently fled
from this world
looking for crevices to hide
at night the world closed
it often slid into the moonlight
wide awake and
there waited for a chirp


养过一只鸟
文｜忒绿

养过一只鸟
总是在不经意间
离开这个世界
去一些缝隙里 遁形
总是在夜晚
等世界打了烊
滑进月光里 醒着
期待一声啁啾

清丽的小诗。赏读忒绿双语是一种享受~

at night the world closed
it often slid into the moonlight
wide awake and
there waited for a chirp

—— 学习~

最后一行，我想知道wait的逻辑主语是谁~

学习！！！！！

青未君好  主语是it；wide awake 是状态定语修饰it：）

卞老师好，周末愉快，互相学习

忒绿诗歌 发表于 2023-3-25 20:32
青未君好  主语是it；wide awake 是状态定语修饰it：）

嗯呢，附议忒绿，那咱们最后一行如果用waiting for…..，咋样？

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wide awake, and waiting for ……., 我想用两个独立主格结构，又觉得不那么工整漂亮～，纠结ing…….

青未 发表于 2023-3-25 21:39
嗯呢，附议忒绿，那咱们最后一行如果用waiting for…..，咋样？

It’s very good to use waiting  instead of waited

忒绿诗歌 发表于 2023-3-26 06:11
It’s very good to use waiting  instead of waited