June text

wen/wangmeilin

how vast the blue sky is
How white seagulls
You stir up a pair of wing
Flying freely
In the morning, a ray of golden glow shines on the earth.
You give to all thing
Bring a vibrant scene
Look at the flowers everywhere
All over the corner of the garden
It blossoms toward the bright sunshine
Gentle breeze
You swear the hometown that a field
This tall chestnut tree
You are like this, towering


六月

文/王美林




蓝色天空是多么的辽阔
白色的海鸥啊
你煽动着那一双有力翅膀
在自由自在飞翔
清晨一缕金色霞光照耀大地
你给这万物
带来了生机勃勃的景象
看姹紫嫣红花朵都开遍
都开遍了那花园的角落
它一朵朵向着灿烂阳光
轻轻的微风啊
你吹拂着故乡那一片田野
这高大的栗子树
你是这样的，伟岸参天

June text   

wen/wangmeilin

how vast the blue sky is
How white seagulls
You stir up a pair of wing
Flying freely
In the morning, a ray of golden glow shines on the earth.
You give to all thing
Bring a vibrant scene
Look at the flowers everywhere
All over the corner of the garden
It blossoms toward the bright sunshine
。。。。Gentle breeze
You swear the hometown that a field
This tall chestnut tree
You are like this, towering

虽然您已经做了三次修改，依然有一些句子不通顺。对不起了啊

许剑桐 发表于 2022-7-6 17:29
虽然您已经做了三次修改，依然有一些句子不通顺。对不起了啊

谢谢徐老师指点，我继续加油！

许剑桐 发表于 2022-7-6 17:29
虽然您已经做了三次修改，依然有一些句子不通顺。对不起了啊

June

By wangmeilin


how vast the blue sky is
White seagulls
You incite up those  wings
Flying freely
In the morning, a ray of golden glow shines on the earth.
You give to all
Bring a vibrant scene
Look at the flowers everywhere
All over the corner of the garden
It blossoms toward the bright sunshine
。。。。Gentle breeze
You sweay  hometown that a field
This tall chestnut tree
You are like this, towering

王美林 发表于 2022-7-7 16:23
June

By wangmeilin

许老师，我已经改正了！

王美林 发表于 2022-7-7 16:25
许老师，我已经改正了！

可能还错了一句，再修改一下，请原谅，徐老师！

看了一下我没有错，这一次老师！