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一位美国诗友的评论 Sarrah walters - Your poem beautifully captures the serene and magical moments of a rising sun. The description of the sun rising in slow motion, emerging from the shades of the clouds, evokes a sense of anticipation and awe. The vivid imagery of the sun's colors - fish belly white, orange yellow, rose red, and lemon green - showcases its gentle and cautious approach, as if afraid to disturb the darkness. The mention of birds in the oak trees trying out their instruments, from flute to trumpet, shakuhachi to reed-rope, and Mongolian khumei to oboe, adds a melodic and harmonious element to the scene. It paints a picture of nature waking up and creating a symphony of sounds to accompany the rising sun. The dewdrops rolling down the grass and the drowsy squirrel emerging from the tree roots further emphasize the tranquility and stillness of the early morning. The arrival of the amber school bus into the community, seemingly out of the haze like an old witch from fairy tales, adds an intriguing and whimsical touch. The mention of the bus taking away the children with their schoolbags under the walking lamps adds a sense of nostalgia and a glimpse into everyday life. Overall, your description captures the beauty, serenity, and subtle wonders of a sunrise, creating a vivid and enchanting scene. Enjoyable |
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