Sound of Early Spring
by Tweeting Green

summer
"I heard it”
autumn
"I heard it”
winter
"I heard it"
it gets louder and louder
stirring and telling
spring
didn’t seem to hear it



早春的声音
文｜忒绿

夏
“听见了”
秋
“听见了”
冬
“听见了”

越来越响
越来越扣人心弦

春
“好像没听见”

忒绿诗歌 发表于 2023-4-2 07:39
好的批评费脑子花时间

额…………

好的批评费脑子花时间

忒绿诗歌 发表于 2023-3-30 11:44
很棒，还押韵，赞

欢迎批评~

很棒，还押韵，赞

细雨湿衣看不见，闲花落地听无声。

The vernal drizzle moistens my gown without a sign
The lazy petals land on the ground without a sound

—— 我这样译如何？

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ふっふっふっ……………

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うん…まあまあかな。

青未 发表于 2023-3-26 11:07
both wet and fall are a little bit direct and dull. what about some words more delicate and discre ...

Misty rains damp the shirt, unseen;
Carefree petals flutter to the ground, silent.

どうですか？

青未君的要求太高了